What do you think?

I wanted to try writing in a different style. This is what came out.
What do you think? I'm not sure on it yet.

The rivers of gold run through this mansion of guilt
Heavy heads and blank stares, all this power makes you hungry
In a dog eats man world, the dogs stay on top
chewing up any that put a cross on their path
And some die in ditches while others live in fog
The time is ticking so move like the hands of the clock
Your eyes are closed but your hands are ready to grab whats exposed
Your eyes are closed but your hands are ready to grab whats exposed
The doves will fly but your irons will keep you held down
So you drown in your bath of dollar bills.
Flip them coins and watch them dance, dance for your eyeless face
Your guts full of their unripe flesh, your table makes an easy grave.


I liked mouth instead of gut for the last line but i thought it sounded kind of sexual and grossed me out haha
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